Wordshop 1
Wordshop 1:
Adding a figurative comparison or contrast, such as a metaphor, simile, or symbol.
(Original) He ate an apple.
(Revised) He ate an apple
the size of a man's head.
Supplying a literal, concrete action or image(that is either real or imagined).
(Original) The days were cool and dry.
(Revised) The days were cool and dry
Each morning the dried dew left
a transparent paisley print of its celebrations
on the glass top patio table.
Adding an elaboration, extension, or distinction to an idea or proposition.
(Original) Computers have spend up modern life.
(Revised) Computers have spend up modern life so much
that the human nervous system was indistinguishable
from computer micro-circuitry.
Adding an idea, meditative moment, or proposition to an image or plot element.
(Original) He ate soup so politely.
(Revised) He ate soup so politely
you'd have thought something in him
had given up on life.
Adding a description to open up a statement or image.
(Original) She seemed to be a pleasant woman.
(Revised) She seemed to be a pleasant woman
although her white uniform, lack of
jewelry, and white, soft-soled shoes
made her presence seem menacing.
Adding plot elements to a dramatic situation.
(Original) He had this habit
of taking off his glasses,
then sighing.
(Revised) He had this habit
of taking off his glasses,
looking up through them,
scanning the sky for a spot,
and then sighing.
Adding characterization (by using analogy) to an action or character.
(Original) She was tall, lovely, and well dressed.
(Revised) She was tall, lovely, and well dressed
and had the same distant look
models in fashion magazines had.
Adding a figurative comparison or contrast, such as a metaphor, simile, or symbol.
(Original) He ate an apple.
(Revised) He ate an apple
the size of a man's head.
Supplying a literal, concrete action or image(that is either real or imagined).
(Original) The days were cool and dry.
(Revised) The days were cool and dry
Each morning the dried dew left
a transparent paisley print of its celebrations
on the glass top patio table.
Adding an elaboration, extension, or distinction to an idea or proposition.
(Original) Computers have spend up modern life.
(Revised) Computers have spend up modern life so much
that the human nervous system was indistinguishable
from computer micro-circuitry.
Adding an idea, meditative moment, or proposition to an image or plot element.
(Original) He ate soup so politely.
(Revised) He ate soup so politely
you'd have thought something in him
had given up on life.
Adding a description to open up a statement or image.
(Original) She seemed to be a pleasant woman.
(Revised) She seemed to be a pleasant woman
although her white uniform, lack of
jewelry, and white, soft-soled shoes
made her presence seem menacing.
Adding plot elements to a dramatic situation.
(Original) He had this habit
of taking off his glasses,
then sighing.
(Revised) He had this habit
of taking off his glasses,
looking up through them,
scanning the sky for a spot,
and then sighing.
Adding characterization (by using analogy) to an action or character.
(Original) She was tall, lovely, and well dressed.
(Revised) She was tall, lovely, and well dressed
and had the same distant look
models in fashion magazines had.
Wordshop 2
Wordshop: 2
hi folks here is today's workshop is about using the techniques of other arts and media.
Today lets begin to use film methods. Film editing expand or compress time to show simultaneity, emotional contrast, or to insert a repeated visual or comment that anchors a series of shots to motif (as in a refrain) or to insert scenes from the past or the future.
So first off, lets look at CUTS or what we call in poetry JUXTAPOSITION. There are 4 kinds of CUTS .
The straight cut is linear in direction, and acts to further the plot or theme in a straightforward way.
for example cut 1; a girl sits by the phone, cut 2; the phone rings and she picks it up. This cut offers a natural easy sense of movement.
The CROSS CUT; the cross cut shows actions taking place at the same time in two or more seperate locations. In poetry its the construction known as the cut-and shuffle poem. In film making D.W.Griffiths invented the technique.
cut 1; a man is hit by a car
cut2; an ambulance starts on its way for the rescue.
The cross cut can also be used to show ironic contrast
cut 1; our man who has just been hit by a car
cut 2; the ambulance on it way gets into a crash and/or
cut 3; slow motion close up of snow flakes falling.
THE CONTRAST CUT; the contrast cut is also used to heighten the tension in a situation. So....
- a soldier being shot
- his friend laughing and drinking in a bar
- the idea is to make the contrast as jarring as possible,
- try using these techniques here are some more examples.
CUTS OR JUXTAPOSITION examples;
Juxtaposition equal images;
its a clear blue day. this must be what it was like to see through Paul Newman's eyes.
Juxtaposition opposite images;
the birds are building their soft nest
among the girders of the motorway
Juxtaposition an equal image and concept;
the branches of the trees are bare.
i feel the same way when im nervous.
Juxtaposition an image to an opposite concept;
the cat falls asleep
to awaken its dreams
Juxtaposition equal concepts;
man invented democracy
when he could feel what other men felt.
Juxtaposition opposite concepts:
what stays is
what doesn't last.
Try some of these to trigger poems or story
Wordshop 3
Today's Wordshop is based on four video prompts,
about the thing you are reading this with, and
you write poems with, your brain.
about the thing you are reading this with, and
you write poems with, your brain.
Meditate on the images of what you are meditating with, now let that idea cook and simmer, then write 20 lines that literally come to mind, then perhaps chop them up in to haiku, or flash fiction story. What do the images remind you of? What are your emotions watching the films? What do you feel? Tell us what you feel, Shakespeare said that was a poets job, to make people feel what they feel.